How about this answer for TOEFL integrated speaking?
Estimate the answer and provide scores according to the guideline.
According to the passage Token reward system is one of the most effective ways in which negative behavior can be corrected and the professor describes an example to explain this he was asked for solving a problem that happened in a local drug treat Center because patients there didn't follow the rule and instruction. they were allowed to talk with friends and family if they follow the rule but it didn't work so the professors suggested that if they follow the rule they were given a token which was exchanged with chosen rewards and it did work so that was example of token reward system.
Delivery: 3/4 - Generally, your speed and intonation are suitable, but some hesitations slightly disrupt the flow of your speech.
Language Use: 3/4 - Your grammar and vocabulary usage is mostly accurate, but some sentences are a bit long and convoluted, which can make the message unclear.
Topic Development: 4/4 - You clearly relayed the main ideas from the lecture and provided specific details and examples to support the points.
Total score: 10/12
Feedback:
Be cautious with your word choice and sentence structure. For instance, instead of saying "he was asked for solving a problem," you could say "he was asked to solve a problem."
Be careful not to run sentences together. Try to break up longer sentences into shorter ones to make your message clearer and easier to understand.
Revised response:
"The passage discusses the token reward system, an effective method for correcting negative behavior. The professor explains this concept further by sharing an instance where he was asked to address an issue at a local drug treatment center. The patients there were not adhering to rules and instructions. Initially, they were allowed to speak with friends and family as a reward for following rules, but this strategy proved ineffective. The professor then suggested a new approach, wherein patients who followed the rules would receive tokens that could be exchanged for rewards of their choosing. This strategy proved successful, exemplifying the effectiveness of the token reward system."