GRAY: Do you know the scoring criteria of independent writing in TOEFL?
GPT: As of my knowledge cutoff in September 2021, the TOEFL (Test of English as a Foreign Language) Independent Writing task was scored on a scale from 0 to 5 according to the following general criteria:
Task Achievement: This criterion assesses how well the test taker addresses the topic and task, and how well the ideas are developed. Full points are given when the response is on-topic, fully addresses the task, and is fully developed with clear and relevant supporting details.
Organization: This criterion assesses the structure of the response. Full points are given when the response is well-organized, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, and when ideas are logically connected with a variety of cohesive devices
Grammar: This criterion assesses the range and accuracy of the test taker's grammatical structures. Full points are given when the response demonstrates a wide range of grammatical structures used accurately.
Vocabulary: This criterion assesses the range and accuracy of the test taker's vocabulary. Full points are given when the response demonstrates a wide range of vocabulary, with no errors that interfere with comprehension.
Each essay is scored independently by at least two trained raters, who don't know what scores the other rater gave. If the raters' scores differ by more than one point, a third rater is brought in to resolve the discrepancy.
The scores from the two tasks in the writing section are then averaged and converted to a scaled score of 0 to 30.
Please verify this information from the official TOEFL website or study guides as the scoring criteria might have been updated or changed after my last training data in September 2021.
GRAY: In this criteria, Would you assess my writing answer below?
Question: Some people think that to improve their concentration, children (ages 5~10) should take a break once between classes. Other people think that they should not take a class for more than one hour. Which view do you agree with?
My Answer: Many people wonder whether children should take a break once between classes or they should not take a class for more than one hour. I believe that taking a break once between classes has more benefits. I feel this way for two reasons which I will examine in this essay. First of all, the most important reason for my opinion is that children under 10 could easily improve their focus on class while studying with intermediate break. In general, teachers find that most of children between 5 and 10 are prone to lose their interest and motivation to focus. This is because consecutive classes make them tired and even exhausted. Certainly, Intermediate breaks between classes enable the students not to lose their energy. This is best examplified by my personal experience. When I was in elementary school student, Our school gave us more frequent breaks between classes. In result, our teacher said she is very happy because the concentration of students improves very much compared to before.
Second, Taking a break between classes could improve efficiency for students. Certainly, It could make student focus on classes for a longer time. If they are just banned from taking classes more than one hour, It would have an bad impact on what is in terms of efficiency. Evidently, Taking a break is indispensable to solve this problem. Consequently, It is better for students to take a break between classes. A study conducted by Cambridge University has revealed that a break between classes makes students do better academic performance. 100 People were randomly selected and divided into two groups. One group took three lessons in a row with 10 minutes break and the other group took the same lessons without any break. The result in this experiment indicated that the children with breaking time showed better academic performance. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that a break once between classes can improve children's concentration. This is because student could easily improve their focus while studying with intermediate break and academic performance by improving efficiency of studying."
GPT: Your essay is well-structured and provides a clear argument in favor of taking breaks between classes. Your supporting examples and reasons are relevant and well-explained. Below is an assessment based on the TOEFL Independent Writing task criteria:
Task Achievement (5/5): You have addressed the topic and task fully. You clearly state your position and provide two well-developed reasons to support your opinion.
Organization (4/5): Your essay is well-organized with an introduction, body paragraphs for each reason, and a conclusion. However, some sentences could be more cohesively connected. For instance, "Certainly Intermediate breaks between classes enable the students not to lose their energy" could be better connected to the previous sentence: "This is because consecutive classes make them tired and even exhausted, but intermediate breaks between classes can help students maintain their energy."
Grammar (3.5/5): Your essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors that slightly interfere with comprehension. For example, "In result, our teacher said she is very happy because the concentration of students improves very much compared to before" could be corrected to "As a result, our teacher was very happy because the students' concentration greatly improved compared to before."
Vocabulary (4/5): Your essay shows a range of vocabulary, but some words are used inaccurately. For example, "bad impact on what is in terms of efficiency" could be more accurately expressed as "negative impact in terms of learning efficiency".
GRAY: Would you give me more feedback for my writing in terms of grammer?
GPT: Overall, your essay is quite good. With a bit more attention to grammar and vocabulary usage, it would score even higher. Keep practicing!
Article Use: Articles (a, an, the) are sometimes missing or used incorrectly in your essay. For example, "When I was in elementary school student" should be "When I was an elementary school student".
Verb Tenses: Pay attention to verb tenses. For example, "our teacher said she is very happy because the concentration of students improves very much compared to before" should be "our teacher said she was very happy because the concentration of the students had improved greatly compared to before."
Capitalization: Be mindful of unnecessary capitalization. For example, in "Certainly Intermediate breaks between classes enable the students not to lose their energy," "Intermediate" should not be capitalized.
Subject-Verb Agreement: Make sure your subjects and verbs agree. For example, "student could easily improve their focus" should be "students could easily improve their focus".
Preposition Use: There are a few minor errors with preposition usage. For example, "a break once between classes" should be "a break between classes once" or "one break between classes".
Sentence Structure: Some sentences are a bit awkwardly constructed or unclear. For example, "If they are just banned from taking classes more than one hour, It would have an bad impact on what is in terms of efficiency" could be clarified to "If they are only allowed to take classes for one hour, it would negatively impact their learning efficiency".
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Question: Some people think that to improve their concentration, children (ages 5~10) should take a break once between classes. Other people think that they should not take a class for more than one hour. Which view do you agree with?
My Answer: Many people wonder whether children should take a break once between classes or they should not take a class for more than one hour. I believe that taking a break once between classes has more benefits. I feel this way for two reasons which I will examine in this essay. First of all, the most important reason for my opinion is that children under 10 could easily improve their focus on class while studying with intermediate break. In general, teachers find that most of children between 5 and 10 are prone to lose their interest and motivation to focus. This is because consecutive classes make them tired and even exhausted. Certainly, Intermediate breaks between classes enable the students not to lose their energy. "This is because consecutive classes make them tired and even exhausted, but intermediate breaks between classes can help students maintain their energy." This is best examplified by my personal experience. When I was in an elementary school student, Our school gave us more frequent breaks between classes. In result, our teacher said she is very happy because the concentration of students improves very much compared to before. "As a result, our teacher was very happy because the students' concentration greatly improved compared to before."Second, Taking a break between classes could improve efficiency for students. Certainly, It could make student focus on classes for a longer time. If they are just banned from taking classes more than one hour, It would have an bad impact on what is in terms of efficiency. If they are only allowed to take classes for less than one hour, it would negatively impact their learning efficiency".
Evidently, Taking a break is indispensable to solve this problem. Consequently, It is better for students to take a break between classes. A study conducted by Cambridge University has revealed that a break between classes makes students do better academic performance. 100 People were randomly selected and divided into two groups. One group took three lessons in a row with 10 minutes break and the other group took the same lessons without any break. The result in this experiment indicated that the children with breaking time showed better academic performance. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that a break once between classes can improve children's concentration. This is because student could easily improve their focus "students could easily improve their focus" while studying with intermediate break and academic performance by improving efficiency of studying."